Feedback

     I am in need of some feedback from my most honest and outspoken readers and friends. As you may or may not know I also write song lyrics…Wait, I can hear you now…”Yeah Jake, you’ve already told us”… “Ad Nauseum!” But, seeing as that has not exactly, led to my desired retirement home in the Tropics, I have been thinking that maybe, just maybe, my opinion of these fantastic country song lyrics has not been quite objective enough. So, I am looking to you, to be a larger and hopefully more upbeat, sounding-board. And perhaps your diversity may offer some (positive and supportive) insight… Before I quit my day (afternoon) job and head down to Nashville, (that’s in Tennessee) to seek my overdue props.

     So, here’s the deal. I had this idea for a song, and I have the first verse, (and it’s probably the chorus as well, or the “hook” as it is called, by those in-the-know) and I would like to know what you wonderful, compassionate and generous friends of mine think of it. What I would like to know is; whether you like it,,, or love it, and how many copies of it, you would order, (once it’s finished, of course) and remember, I did refer to you as my generous  friends. Also, it is at present, untitled. Your suggestions are encouraged and welcomed, as are your bids for the naming rights…So, with a forked tongue, completely ensconced in my cheek, I give you my latest work of musical genius!!

Have a merry, musical Monday,

Jake.

As Yet Untitled

I like beans and beer for breakfast,

Wheaties and whiskey at night,

and I know that it sounds risky,

but, I think I’ll be alright.

‘Cause I can handle the Wheaties,

and I can handle, the whiskey and beer,

 I know there’s two i’s in Dixie,

and I know it’s the beans I fear.

Jack Downing

Oct. 2011

(To be continued)

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Hearth and Health are wonderful things and if you're without either such sorrow that brings So I cannot express enough thanks to my Lord and to my family and friends for the support you afford! ~Jack Downing~
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7 Responses to Feedback

  1. adeeyoyo says:

    When I say I ‘like’ the post, it doesn’t mean I ‘like’ the song… Fact of the matter is: I can’t HEAR the song, Jack. Don’t you want to put your money where your mouth is (respectfully speaking) and post us a sound version. Pleeze…

    • Denise, Denise, ‘beauty’ as they say ‘is in the eye of the beholder.’ Trust me it will not be in the ear of the… Did you not, read the part where I said, “nor carry a tune”? What is it that they say, ‘be careful what you wish for’….. “SOUND advice there.” And furthermore, I would not know how orwhere to begin (I did mention recently that I am a ‘Techno-Weanie’)… Again you are spared,but I thank you from my heart,anyway. lol Jake.

      • adeeyoyo says:

        Oh, Jack, Jack, no need to sing (and I’m probably worse than you), but what about humming under your breath? And my tunes of choice are those as sung by The Boss, or Queen or perhaps Elvis will do. I want to experiment with reading my poetry and I think the way to go is with the webcam. I saw a ‘video’ button on it… Thing is I don’t want anyone to hear me practice, lol!

  2. Beth Ann says:

    I have a song headache about Wheaties and Whiskey now….the problem is there is no tune so it is just kind of winging around in my brain randomly!!! I have alluded to the fact that I am not a country music fan so “my” version is rap. Why don’t you work that one out??? Haha!! Words are catchy—I give it two thumbs up!

    • Thank you so much.. But RAP,,,, bite your little ol’ tongue. Again with the btw, let me get this straight,, you are from OHIO the HEARTLAND of this great nation, and you don’t LOVEcountry music? Sacrilege, go wash your mouth out with soap!! ha ha ha. RAP music, indeed.

  3. Perhaps you should explore music related jobs instead. Do they have a banjo factory near you?

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